Oculama

This comic had quite a lot going for it, completion marks, smart layouts and usage of page-space, fantastic colors and even an opening and closing page to round out a perfectly polished comic! (Covers & End Covers dont rlly decide much of anything, i just always appreciate it)

There are some small tweaks and adjustments i think would have made the comic that much better: Firstly, page 8- being a rather important crux for the turning point in the comic- The vision that Large Knight saw when scanning The Amber is just a tad unclear, i assume they were scanning, saw the bugs, saw how they got trapped in amber, then the last is a bit unclear to me. I also couldn't help but feel that the comic suffers from a rather abrupt end, as soon as the scan is complete, each character skirting to a halt and agreeing to travel alongside each other seemed a bit too much like a narrative concession for running out of page space. I do love a good transition from round to round, but this is a common OCT comic issue, so i hope you do not feel as if i am calling you and you alone out here! It may just be a matter of taste, but i feel as if these things can end up betraying the tone built up throughout the comic up to the last couple pages. Great Job regardless! I can only hope to see more!

My MY this comic shocked me more as it went along, i had seen some of your other works (an occasional snippet from Smack-down Central OCT) and by GOD you can do a fucking action sequence!! If there is one thing this comic holds solidly over the other, and most others within the tourney so far, its action composition, sequencing, and the power of the Page Turn. Flipping through some of these to the next splash felt great! And that's what made this match so damn close to me-- I had to fling these comics back and forth with myself for a bit before my decision, as they are really close and really similar in many structural and narrative aspects

I think what ultimately decided the comics, other than general completion marks for polish and quality, i believe were some of the compositional elements of the comic. Whenever id look at each panel, they're clear, readable, with a great bit of grey-scaling and a simple splash of color to help signify what was important, that's great! But some compositions could end up looking a tad empty, primarily page 5, i feel like is a perfect example of small edits that could be made to make the comic even MORE impactful-- Subtle smoke trails denoting the motion of the beastial machine rising and twitching to meet the Large Knight's Gaze, more onomatopoeia like the SMASH on the big impact panel a couple pages later would sell each moment that much more. I'd reccomend looking to Wgni's comic for some good utilization of those, as they have great uses in their submission! Other than that, this comic has the same sort of OCT-Ending syndrome as i described in the opponent's review, as both comics feel like they have an obligation to halt the action, and have each character come to an understanding and transition to the next round. This feels more like concessions for page space and "needing an ending," to me, but perhaps that is simply a difference in taste. Whenever OCT comics end this way it just feels as if they stop their own momentum a bit. These two were great comics in their own right, and I'm always excited to see more from you, hope to catch even more comics!!