Oculama

Not going to lie this is pretty rough. You're going to want to get a lightbox or a sharpie or something. You're really going to want to get a fresh page to line your work cause keeping it just as sketches is pretty rough and looks really incomplete. If youre going to use the markers as well you need lines that aren't pencils as the markers overpowered everything in that final panel and it is pretty unreadable. You also need to watch out for the eraser smudges over on the dialogue. I have seen people who will put cut outs of the dialogue on top of their pages, you could try that when it gets really smudgy like it did in the first page. Nice work submitting an intro comic.

I'm not going to give much of an art critique, seeing as this comic is largely unfinished and rough. But I do have a few issues with the writing:

I think the fact that this comic is from Tam's POV presents a unique situation for the story to explore how a god would feel suddenly transitioning from immortality to mortality (something akin to one of my favourite comics "The many deaths of Laila Starr"), and with Tam being Tiamat, it had the potential to present an interesting clash between how Tam used to view humans as a god vs. how she feels about them now that she actually gets to interact with them in a more direct, grounded way.

Unfortunately, this comic kind of falls flat at either of those things.
Tam's misanthropy is presented without actually showing any depth. Yeah, she says *why* she hates humans in the narration boxes, but we don't see the things she mentions happen on-screen. We don't get to empathize with Tam's feelings, or see anything that proves her point; so she just comes across as a bitter old woman who hates everyone for the typical reasons a misanthrope would, without any hint as to her past godhood and how that would influence her perspective on mortals.

I also think some of the things Tam says (like the comparison between humans and rats, and her desire to basically exterminate ALL humans), is eerily similar to fascist rhetoric. Which would've been interesting had you played into that more, and shown her as a genuinely evil person--- but this story doesn't really do that either.

So Tam is just kinda stuck in this middle ground of misanthropy and nihilism where I'm left wondering if she was meant to be interpreted as a villain? Or if some of the things she says are a reflection of something else entirely?
The writing is not bad, it just leaves me wondering as to what your intentions are when it comes to this character; Something that would maybe help you write a better a story is to think about the larger themes of your work and then find ways to communicate those themes effectively.
Characters are tools to carry a message.

I love the contrast between Tam's mundane, grating outer mask and the inner monologue of pure I Have No Mouth, and I Must Scream style hatred for humanity. It's also a really fresh angle to have a character openly rooting for Kudra when most of the cast will be running from it or fighting it, and I'm genuinely sad we won't get to wax poetic about humanity's flaws together in the tournament. Tam seems like a fascinating character. If anything she feels a little constrained by needing to stay mortal enough for the disaster setting, and I'd love to see her get to stretch her legs as the Mother Below. The bones here are absolutely solid.