Oculama

Nice to see you put your intro comic out and have it set up. Your first two characters are interesting looking and it's nice to see you have more range to your designs. You could go with less aggressive usage of the 'plant brushes' and instead try for a 'less is more' approach with them. My eyes are more drawn to the bark of the trees for being made by hand, same as the flowers in the trees. The brushes are far less interesting to look at compared to your own natural style. Improving on that and how you craft backgrounds in general would do a lot more favors for you.

With regards to the story, I admittedly have no real idea what is happening here. I am assuming that these two things we see in the beginning are related to Tick and Tock in some way, but it's not clear what relationship they have. Whether they're related to the other or if there is some other unknown rivalry. Beyond the fact that they have similar color schemes, a lot of this just comes off like we're missing maybe a good two or three pages of build-up to get to these pages. As it stands, this is something that you'll need to elaborate more on in their next comics, because this comic is unclear what is going on. I looked at their profiles to see if I was missing something, but even that still means there's a weak point in your story telling if supplemental material is necessary.

Still, I hope whatever you do next will have some clearer storytelling, because its obvious you have an idea here with regards to a larger story you want to tell with them, but you will need some help or a second pair of eyes to help determine if any of it is going to get across to the reader. I wish you the best of luck on the next comic you make. Good work.

Ayy! Glad you're able to submit an intro for your character! I love how you do the backgrounds and the nice texture you added to it. The story is intriguing but I feel that it is missing a lot of context. What is the relationship between the two characters in the first panel to Tick + Tock? From what I can gather Tick and Tock were watching them from that mysterious cube device? What was it exactly? Seems like a time-related thing (well, I confirmed that by reading the bio lol. But still, in comics it is generally good practice to assume your readers will know nothing about your character going in). I love that motion blur effect you used in the last panel of page one though. Despite me being confounded by the storyline, I do want to know more so hopefully the next episode will give us more clarity about these characters :)

Welcome and grats on the hard wrought intro!
I will admit, upon first read then the second I found myself at a loss as to what was happening. A great deal of your comic- I'd say the whole of it doesn't really inform the reader the basic tenants if a story- the who what where and why.

Who are these characters?
What are they doing or fighting about?
Where are they?
Why are they there or doing what they're doing at all?

It's clear you got big ideas. I just think you're so familiar with them you forget your audience doesnt know anything so you have to start with a narrative framework. I think if you ask yourself those questions before putting pen to paper, it'll really help better inform your comic and allow your reader to get into what you're presenting. It'll also prompt things to ask yourself like "I should add an establishing shot so people know where I'm setting this comic." or "I should use this word bubble to mention both characters names"

I think you have fun character designs. I like the expressions in this comic, they're very fun. I think how you use the blur to convey action and the explosion works really well.
I don't really understand what is going on in this comic? It's unclear to me who the characters are in the beginning, how they are related to Tick and Tock, or what the shattering of the box means (I assume some kind of reality shattering?). Sometimes when you have a lot of lore in your head, it can be hard to make things understandable to other people. I would recommend asking a friend to read your script before your draw your comic, so they can help you spot what might be unclear to other readers.
I like the potential this has to be a fun story, I just need more explanation!