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OH I come away from this with so many questions. More often than not a comic that leaves you with questions tends to imply there wasn't sufficient explanation, but in this case, you've piqued so much interest in this world, the characters conversations, the story behind the weapons and so much more that I think the questions are a good thing. This feels like such a tasty amuse bouche into this characters lore that I am ready for the main course. From the curious ticks etched into their arm, to the enigmatically monstrous weapons made of bones. The teasing peeks into this once upon a time world while we eavesdrop on this conversation was framed in such a good way. Almost as if it was a conversation we shouldn't of peeked in on with the use of shadows and silhouettes. Your infinite scroll I believe was used to great effect as well- you kept a motif with dwindling or changing aspects like the light or phases of the moon.
It's clear you have an artist and writers eye for storytelling which is no mean feat. Definitely look forward to what else Strike has in store :)

Just an incredible intro here. Your panelling, page flow, and creativity are already at a high level, the colors are vibrant, the writing is poetic and beautiful. For your first comic ever, it's pretty dang stunning, The final panel on page 5 to me is the standout image of this comic, showing rather than telling. If I were to say anything regarding things to improve on moving further, work on your figures. There's not a clear full-body shot of Strike in this rather lengthy intro comic, although in this instance it did strengthen the dreamlike, fragmented memory style of storytelling. Improving the figure is daunting, coming from me it's a bit ridiculous as figures are my weakest spot as well, but considering how strong your other fundamentals are it'll only pay off down the road. Great work.

I've been very curious about Strike since the moment you submitted them and this comic does not disappoint. I can tell that each panel was carefully planned and it blended like a symphony with your writing. The bold colors you used are wonderful to look at. The point of crit I can offer is just to keep practicing anatomy and maybe some understanding of values to set the mood of the scenes even further (I think it will compliment your writing even more). Speaking of which, your writing is like poetry. Definitely the strongest point of this already amazing comic.

What a wonderful intro comic for a very interesting character. You successfully got me rooting for Strike from this point on. I hope you grace us more with your work. I can't wait to see where you (and Strike) go from here!

This comic is great! I love the colors, the crispy lineart, and some of the layouts in these strips. If I had to point out an issue, art-wise, it'd be that it's occassionally hard to tell what's going on; I think this is because there are a lot of close-ups in your comic and not a lot of establishing shots. You don't have to follow my advice, but I like to make a mental note to include at least 1 establishing shot in each page. It doesn't have to be a wide shot either, just something that shows us the setting, and where all the characters are.

Glassmaker was a lovely Introduction to Strike and their rich unfolding lore. It leaves me very excited to see what comes up next for them. The Element that stood out the most to me was you did some really visually and creatively exciting panel work in these pages that worked with a more "scrolling" way of reading. Not Only were they exciting visually to look at, they effectively helped the narrative. I really enjoyed the scroll effect with the use of the moon phases to emphasize the passage of time.

I did notice in some of your panels you're almost a little too zoomed in on the object and you leave a lot of open negative space that doesn't add to the overall composition (I Catch myself doing similarly). Such as panels 1-3 on pg4. I think you could have pushed more of the objects into frame without losing some of that element of mystery in the lead up to the reveal on the same page.

You did a really Great job with this and I Look forward to seeing more from you! Thank you for sharing this with us!

What a fascinating comic! This storytelling was amazing and intriguing. I love this past trauma that seems to exist for Strike and while it's unexplained - it makes it so interesting. I really would love to see the history to her caretaker and everything else. This is a super cool first comic for them and I think your setting you're working with is very cool as well.

Your coloring is a little flat in some spots. The thin lighting is both an interesting match to your style and also removing some of the punch that it could have? It removes all of the depth it could have. It's especially noticeable with regards to Strike's hair, since it makes it look just too one-dimensional when hair like that should have a lot of big volume.

I would suggest staying the course in your style and then adding another layer of shade. You actually already do that on the handle of the axe in your Neutral Pose of the comic which looks great! Be very careful using the tones so close to the line art, it makes it look like artifacts are present in the render.

This is an excellent first comic on here and I can't wait to see you do more of this in the future. Great work!