Oculama

It sure isn't Halloween yet but this comic made me feel like it! Glad you're finally able to get this comic out after all the technical issues you had! As for points of improvement, I'd say maybe try to practice more consistency. Some pages have line art and some don't for instance and perhaps a bit of practice on your edges. I feel like some of the shadings were too blurry where they shouldn't be like the rendering on Labu's head at the bottom of page 5. I thought that eye on page 3 was really cool though! You did a great job rendering that one. I love the build-up you did explaining Labu's goals and motivations from here on out. Sounds like he's all set up to take on more fights!

What an opener. A spooky little flashback that affords us a nice little lore set up for your dastardly little pumpkin head. It's nice to see you not afraid to go really big with macro shots like the eye on page 3. It makes for interesting gutter space and composition. I also dig that we have a generous use of sound effects. I think having them be different styles and fonts to coincide with the feeling of the sound isn't a bad thing, but I think for the sake of style, it would be nice to grant them a unifying thing- like perhaps the same color.
If I had a note for you, it would be consistency. Your style and quality staggeringly goes up and down page to page. I'm uncertain if that's on account of the deadline or being experimental. Additionally, hit me up on the discord! I'd love to talk to you about word bubble format and font to punch up your comic dialogue :D

Labu I think this is a very very good debut for you! You can tell you put a lot of time, love and effort into this, and while it you longer than you wanted it to to get done, I am so glad you did.
Off the bat, I think your color palette overall was a good choice for this. Sticking with a mostly Orange and Blue complimentary color scheme was a good move, and I think your use of blacks where used nicely. The overall story pacing was done pretty well.

Critique wise, some of your lay outs got a little awkward with placement, most notably on page 14, its a little cramped especially with so much visually going on. I think Lord Labu being a little smaller and more in focus in the second to last panel would have helped balance the overall page composition and give some of the other elements some room to breath.

Your word balloon placement was over all pretty solid, but a smaller font and not as .."tightly" fitted into the balloons would have been beneficial visually. But, that takes reading more comics and more practice making comics to get the flow of it.

Overall you're off to a really great start and again, Im really glad you moved forward and finished this. Can't wait to see what Labu does now!!

This is a cool comic! You've got some great style, your colors are quite intense but not too grating, I really enjoyed the Grecian Urn style on page 13. The poetic word of Labu is fun to read, its quite prosaic but I generally understood the gist of what he was saying which is the balance you want to strike. To improve - scale your pages and your word bubbles down about 25%, and make sure to plan where the text will go before you draw, the text on page 13 is placed a bit haphazardly and makes the art look a bit cramped. I think you could also do with more panels on less pages, in the future. Good stuff, keep it up!

MANAGED TO SOMEHOW SUBMIT MY REVIEW EVEN THOUGH THE TIME'S UP???? ANYWAY

I think this is interesting. I like how dark and gritty the atmosphere of this comic is, I feel as though is it a little inconsistent at times. For example, sometimes there's lineart, sometimes it's lineless, sometimes there's heavy shading (which is really good btw). May just be a nitpick though.

The story was my favourite but also my least favourite part of this comic. To elaborate, I love the ideas and events presented here. Labu being a fun villain that works for the devil, and has to bring demi-gods (Apotheos) to the devil's side? Super fun.
However, you should probably keep in mind that your readers won't instantly know all of your lore. I was a little bit confused when the devil mentioned a "faction war"; this was not established at the beginning, nor anywhere else in the story. I have to wonder what this could possibly mean?
Perhaps we'll get to see that in future comics.

You may also benefit from proof-reading or getting a beta reader to look at your dialogue; While decent for the most part, there are parts where the flow of it feels rather strange and unnatural (in the page with a close-up shot of the devil, I feel like the "You are the smartest person I know" line should come before the "apparently a bunch of folks" line. Perhaps with a few tweaks.)

Overall, I somewhat enjoyed this. Can't wait to see more :)