Oculama

I love how goofy this comic is, and Nyaomi has SUCH a great character and vehicle for hijinks. Her growing panic over her social numerical standing had me snorting- made even more staggeringly apparent with the progressively plummeting score. The stakes feel appropriate to the highschool setting in such a charming way. Hell, I'd wanna talk to the new girl who can walk the dog with her yo-yo. Poor Nyaomi- if she don't got yo-yo skills, what's she have to offer??
I have to commend you for that creative use of paneling on the last page using the yo-yo strings to frame Nyaomi's stricken face. Taken down by a kids toy- never stood a chance lol

You have some fabulous expressions going on here- especially when it comes to Sybil's growing frustration. If it works for you, I'd suggest pushing the boundaries of the face so you're not so constrained to the borders of the face. Let the mouth extend past the skull, or bug out an eye. Granted its a bit toonier, but your comics and look I feel lends itself to that style.
While you have a clear passion for comics, there are some hiccups where I feel there's so much you want to say page to page they tend to get congested. That's especially apparent on page 2 where I feel you packed so much in ,wheras I think stretching these events out over two pages would've let your composition breathe a bit. Still, these two make for a really fun little match up- glad to see this face off!

I definitely feel as if you would benefit greatly from a dedicated palette that controls a lot of the hyper saturated tones you usually use for your comics, sometimes i feel like the colors of your comic can just use the colors from each person's reference sheet without thinking more on how they would work together in the actual comic, but that's just my view on it perhaps i'm wrong. the Composition of shots and layouts in this comic is actually pretty good and clean, and the textures help for the empty panels, i just think that it could look a lot more cohesive with some small choices like a palette, more consistent line weights, more line confidence and balancing the line weights and panel width. Good job!

I believe that your comic style could benefit a good bit from a consistent line weight and a careful attention to the balance that the line weights of the characters & backgrounds, and the line weights of the panels.The readability can sometimes be affected by how close the line widths are between these two, and making them more distinct would help guide the eye throughout the comic. There is also something to be said about now having as many panel breaking moments, as the panels are there to help contain and contextualize, so when much of the art and speech bubbles break those panels it leads the eye throughout the page, and since there are so many examples of them on each page the eye becomes confused and readability is hurt! Just some things to think about when making your next work, good job@!

Ninja - I missed Nyaomi so I am glad to see her back. I don't know how you manage to do all these comics in succession and they are all in good quality. I am impressed. Usually folks depict their character 'winning' in their side of the battle so the ending is quite unexpected for me. But I love this new rivalry between Nyaomi and Sybil. I can't wait to see where it leads to! You got a knack for keeping things at a cliffhanger while not making your readers feel that the story is not finished. It's a tricky balance that you managed to pull off. Great work!

Xeno - Oh my gosh what glorious chaos lol. Though it did get too chaotic for me sometimes that I lost track of what was really happening haha. I love how this accurately depicts high school drama which always sound ridiculous from an outside (aka older person's) perspective while it seems like the end of the world for these kids. I can't tell if these are your sketches or inks but they are pretty neat and clean overall. Just watch the typos next time as I spotted several of them. I love the contrast between Sybil's temper and Nyaomi's carefree attitude. Good job!

Nyaomi is your best character. They're a lot of fun and a good opportunity for you to flex your surreal comedic muscles. This one is no different and you did a great job putting her against Sybil. It does feel a little bit like the ending wasn't fully formed. Almost like we have all the setup but no proper punchline or resolution to this. Perhaps this is a sign we're meant for a sequel. Overall, great comic.

This was a really good comic and you displayed a very nicely done comedy comic. Certainly this is by virtue of your opponent being that type of person, but you could have taken a different route that wasn't as humorous, so the fact you kind of nailed it nicely is well done on your part.
One of the bigger issues visually speaking is that while you are a very color focused artist, it'd be in your interest to utilize your blacks more often. You have a lot of spots that you're doing hatching on that would probably be better if you just took a fill-tool to the area and give us some solid blacks instead. It'd be cool to see you play with doing a comic with a black-focused grey scale in the future. That being said, can't wait to see you jump on it again soon. Nice work!

You utilized your time in all the right places for this comic. It's good quality and the story doesn't overstay it's welcome. I liked the way you revealed the joke and kept building on it throughout the comic. You've got some unique layout ideas that if built and experimented on, could lead to some really interesting panels in the future (the final panel being the most obvious example to me). Nice reference to the monkey western death tournament I found that mention entertaining.

You've got some creative panels going but it's a little bit cluttered at times and it slightly overwhelms the comic. Watch out for spelling errors and cramped/overflowing speech bubbles, sometimes it's kind of hard to see which speech bubble I'm supposed to read next. I enjoyed the humor, you wrote and utilized your opponent well. You had some good visual storytelling on page three and you've got good ideas for posing and expressions, keep it up!