Oculama

I feel like I got a much clearer understanding of your process with this comic. I've never seen your drawings on paper before, but this illuminated a few things for me! I like how even with it being unfinished, you explained things well with your visuals. I like your choice of greyscale with only red being seen. It's a very strong choice of a color scheme and I hope you stick with it in next round as well. Clearly, we're missing a lot of relevant detail from this and while that part is a bummer, you're obviously moving on and I hope that your next round comes together and you're able to finish fully. Good work otherwise!

There've been a lot of great flavors of death game in this first round, and I was low-key hoping someone would go with the businessplace brawl/ belko experiment-style death game.

The humour here doesn't bang you over the head, but there's enough sly chuckles to be had on the back half that it's worth taking a moment to appreciate. The bracket page/ slide is of course great, both conceptually as a sort of goofy style of letting the corporate cream rise to the top, but also in how stragiht-faced it's played, with just a little twinkle in the author's eye. I also love how seriously AND immediately Emilio and Kuro take the tournament. Barely a word spared to go into any real detail about the rules of the death game, but they throw themselves at the contest with full eyes and hearts. The business world sure is cut-throat!

I like the use of red throughout - good sober artistic decision given the time limit on the round - the additional touch of having red lighting on the front half of the comic works great too - makes the red feel a more threatening element of the setting.

(Also - NME? classic. I was a big fan of Kirby right back at ya! back in the day)

I like your illustration style; your characters look very crisp, and you get a lot of emotion conveyed over the course of the comic - from groggy to absolutely feral for that white collar advancement. It sells the unexpectedness of the scenario and the brutality of the fisticuffs nicely :)

Really nice comic - doing a lot without saying too much, and capturing the humor and brutality in the senseless, bleak core nature of a death tournament story.

Haha, has someone been watching Severance? I really love the nod not only to possible BEST SHOW but showcasing your opponent by giving Kuro a corporate motif to battle his way out of. You had the start of something promising here and I'm dying to know more about this NME company and how these two fit in this scenario? I hope the answer is this is the interview process so you gotta ensure you're the only candidate. You had the start of a neat method of possibly dispatching Kuro, I certainly hope we see a redemption update and see the follow through to what you intended here.

I like the format you have with the land scape pages, i thought that was a fun way to vary up the pacing of a round, and allowed for wider shots that made you feel more in the room with the characters. Though it is unfinished i appreciate that the premise that allows the characters to be more intertwined by having a shared company that they both work for, the conglomerate that's behind the death games is a good framing and i like how it ties together the lives of two otherwise disparate characters

I liked it, I could tell the time limit was the biggest obstacle to your comic considering how things got rushed, an even then, I couldn't help but chuckle at the abrupt nature of the fight. The artwork you showed off was really good too. Even the sketches at the tail end were fun to read through. All in all, a business-oriented comic works well, I wonder if you're going to make business variants of the other characters? Should be fun to see either way.

This comic started out strong! It's unfortunate that the deadline looks like it got to you, because it looks like it was leading up to an interesting breaking point for both characters. Aside from that, the character art and backgrounds are solidly sketched, and it's interesting to see how your comicking process looks with the sketches you uploaded. I also hope that Doodle can get up their comics later as well in the future, if they have time!

Emilio and Kuro were such a perfect match-up for this round with both being regular working men. I was immediately intrigued when I saw them wake up in what looked like a normal conference room (ignore the devil-red ominous lighting lol). I can tell that the deadline snuck up on you towards the latter pages but I really liked the earlier pages and your art style. I am not sure if it was just me but I was a bit lost on what the diagram on page 6 was portraying that seemed to have led Emilio to kill Kuro at the end. So I was hoping to get more clarity on that. Overall, it was a really good start and despite the unfinished nature of your entry, consider me invested in Emilio's future!

Thank you for submitting Mr.Kent!

I think you had a nice start to your comic, the grayscale approach with just a little bit of red to make important elements pop was nicely done!
I think the layouts could have used a little tweaking for space. (The Table on the second page breaking into the last panel, unused negative space in the third page,which makes the different elements kinda just float)
The story set up you were going for was intriguing, and Id like to see where you were going with it.
Otherwise I think you had a nice start with your comics, and I hope after voting ends you upload a finished comic, I'd like to see it!
Thank you for sharing!

You got the premise established and that's the most important part. While we didn't see the outcome of the death I was disturbed regardless at how quickly these two went from casual conversation to up each other's throats. No time to consider alternatives its him or me! The corporate world is truly scary! I'm a little bummed to see this incomplete but not much can be done if life gets in the way. I just hope you're awarded more free time in your life so you can make round 2 truly shine!

Congratulations and condolences on your easy win. This comic has a strong opening, but it undeniably only feels like half a comic, and unfortunately the half we got is mostly just set-up and exposition with all the meat of the story still lying on the cutting room floor! The art and (scant) dialogue on those early pages is really nice though, and I'm definitely looking forward to seeing more now that you know how much material you can comfortably make in the allotted time.

A match-up of corporate characters is practically ideal and I like that you steered into it for this. There's unfortunately not too much I can say with it understandably being unfinished due to the deadline. Going forward I do question whether or not the landscape page layout works. I think there's some inventive stuff you could do with it, but I think it'd break up panels strangely from page to page. It seems like it could end up making things cramped.

Don't sweat it though, it happens. I look forward to seeing what you do next!