Oculama

What a gorgeous looking comic, so warm and hostile at the same time. All the wheel dealing, backstabbing and shooting make for an intense action comic that ironically never puts on the brakes. The train crash was so climactic it could have made its own ending, but then the aftermath and cleanup make for great drama so it doesn't feel like much of a betrayal. I'd love to see some of the lineart be affected even more by the coloring, as sometimes the black stood out: otherwise, perfectly beautiful.

Finally some real monkey business.
You picked a good classic western opening, the train heist. There's excitement some monkeys and action. It's definitely the most energetic comic this round. I am wondering why Florida cares that this other random monkey with him lives or dies or not. So far Florida has been pretty uncaring about everyone else on the train and even just lets the other passengers die right after. Unless Florida has some reason hidden in his backstory to care about a recent widower it feels out of character for him. Other than that Florida is basically completely amoral so far.

You do have some ambitious pages in this. What with the train and big action sequences. The backgrounds do ground the comic and give the action a sense of place throughout. Though your lineart looks wobbly even on objects that should be rigid and smooth. Everything looks like its drawn with the same weight and the messiness isnt done in a way that looks intentional. There's panels where things just kind of run together, especially during the aftermath of the crash. The colors too look kind of slapped on. You pick them good to at least separate characters from background but with the very soft shadows and this what looks like a brush filter that's just put on top of everything makes your shapes have little volume and muddies up your colors alot and makes some objects run together. Like your trees and your flames look basically the same if it wasnt for one being green and the other orange. Maybe you could put more defined shades or shadows on objects to make them really pop and stand out more. Same with line art. More care into making the lines either more even or maybe using like a looser ink brush with more spot blacks to give it that rugged energetic look I think you might be trying to go for. You got ambition and I think taking more time to refine your lines and tones could help alot with visual clarity.

I think you rely overly on the texture overlay to make up for lacklustre panel composition, which as a result makes your art look weirdly sparkly, like glitterfoil trading cards. You have decent ideas, and your art isn't *terrible*, but I get the impression that you're not applying yourself to your full capabilities. Do you script your comics? How many revisions do you do? I think the pacing in this comic feels "off", and your jokes don't quite land right. I know it would be a different comic, but if you had focused harder on only one half of your current comic (whether that be before the crash or after), the finished product would feel a lot more complete, and you might not struggle so much to make room for jokes in your comic.

Ninja - Oh wow, this was quite the adventure! It honestly felt like I was watching a Western heist flick. Findlee absolutely delivered- showing off his badass skills and staying cool as a cucumber despite all the chaos. The Ringtail Gang was the total opposite in energy, but just as dangerous. At times, it felt like Bama got more ‘screentime’ than the Ringtail Gang, but it did give us a nice look at Findlee’s softer side. The art looks solid, too! I love seeing how you're really settling into your style more with each comic. Great stuff!

This comic feels hollow in half of its cast. The Ringtail Gang feel like they don't really do anything except be stupid and die, which to be fair being stupid is in their bio but theres still room to do something with them. The majority of the writing feels like it went into a side character that wasn't a part of either Actual Characters story. Outside of that guy it feels like nothing really happened story wise. Events happened, but not much story.

On the art side of things I think you have some cool ideas in here that could've cooked a little longer. The wanted posters for Findlee are a cool idea that could be more prominent on the page. Giving page real estate to Findlee doing something cool while having the poster frame him could be good, as well as using it also to introduce the ringtail gang with one of their own. Going forward this could be a cool way to introduce both characters in a round. I'd also like to see a ninja comic that puts more time into composition and linework than colour and texture. While colour is always nice to have, it's good to push the essentials.

Following up directly from your prologue comic, i love to see it. This comic's got a lot of good stuff - tragedy, action, a dope explosion, bloos and guts galore, good stuff. You've proven time after time you can deliver great comics with impressive pagecounts, and with finished inks and colors, so i think i'll dig into this style you've crafted - what i think will elevate your style from here is to hone in on directional lighting and to try to render it onto your characters as much as you do on the backgrounds, to really marry those two elements, as right now it does feel like the characters and the backgrounds are seperate elements that dont interact, lighting-wise.

Dude. Findlee is an Western action star. From the fit to the fighting, everything about this character and comic seems to have come together almost effortlessly. Also kudos on actually drawing out a whole train exterior. As someone who has a tough time drawing mechanical things, seeing it in comics and tournaments at that is pretty impressive. You have an almost cinematic slash Sin City eye for your storytelling and fight choreography. I saw inkling of Frank Miller with the machine gun rat-a-tat of our enemy lemur in mid air. There are actually multiple freeze frame moments in your comic that really just hit the reader with how breakneck the events played out- which, considering this is a train careening to a crash makes sense. Cannot wait to see what Findlee takes on next.

The antihero nature of Florida was excellent. You gained a good momentum from your battle with Skiff and your setting within the train. Moving forward with all of that, you really developed something special thanks to keeping that story rolling - which I am very excited to see how this develops. Your colors were looking excellent as well. On the whole, this was an awesome comic and you've really set a bar for the other participants to match and follow through on. Great work!

Woo yeah! bring on the violence! I'm digging all the different types of westerns we've all been going for. I like how things went from 0 to 100 in terms of chaos between our battle and this one. I think I'm starting to see a little bit of your inspirations for this, I could be totally wrong, but this comic very much reminded me of the Hellsing anime. It's got that self indulgent hyperviolence I can't get enough of. I hope this isn't the last we see of the bartender it kind of feels like you're going somewhere with him. Good luck in the next round!