Oculama

This was a nice way to book-end these characters' after their death. I really liked that you had Edward acting as a detective, working on solving the mysteries regarding Sera's demise and her family as well. You handled it really well in terms of telling the story. Your art suffered a little bit as I imagine the comic grew a little bigger than you intended. I hope the next comic you take on, you try scaling your story down or taking more time to polish the product. However, again, the story was on point and very good. Can't wait to see the next one. Good work!

A fantastic follow-up to the battle with Labu, I really like what you did with this comic. Getting to resolve the camera was a really neat idea. I also appreciate how none of this is at-odds with the tournament stories and fits very nicely on the timeline of it. You really utilized your opponents' characters to their full potential here as well, I liked that the crime aspect tied in. On the whole this was a great comic! Great work!

I love tat this followed the 80's buddy adventure in highschool trope. :D The unexpected meeting, the fashionable undercover show and unsettling promise alluded to the end are all really engaging story beats that connect to plenty of other comics and content that Sera has been a part of, which is really fun. It definitely encourages followers to pore over ALL your comics as there are so many hints, easter eggs and answers to questions asked in other comics. The choice of cursed camera was a GREAT end to this.
Love LOVE the fashion designs in Sera's show- namely the showstopper fit that Angelica was placed in. I get such subtle airs of Paradise Kiss with aspects of the design with is such a nostalgic throwback. Your montage of Sera 'working' on the dress with little more than working hands and a measuring tape was a really clever depiction of progression of time and what's going on during that time. Its clear Sera is near and dear, not to mention fully realized. Glad we got to see these extras before we have to officially say RIP.

I think you did a good job of getting more creative with your page and panel layout on one page which was really nice to see. Seeing a progression of events in what looks like photographs was a nice nod to your characters investigative acumen. Its a great start, but it seems you defaulted back to the square panel to panel format going forward. I encourage you to explore this more! :D Break characters out of the panels, fling elements in the gutters. Find compositions that enhance and engage the events playing out on your pages.
That said, your environments and backgrounds are a great start- I see them! It's good to see the transition from city to forest and eventually graveyard, but I encourage you give us more. The events in the graveyard seem to be the main stage of the events that play out in your comic. That setting would be great to set the mood, add dread, darkness, grit and texture. Lots of interesting elements are in a setting like this- Mausoleums, sculptures, groundskeepers quarters, ominous morticians buildings- pack those things in! :D It would do wonders for adding personality to the world your characters are walking around in

Ooooh, this is TERRIFIC!

Having Edward tracking down Angelica was a good conceit to open on, as it fits what we've seen of their characters to date. The whole chase and flow of events brings the action of the comic to the HS quite naturally.

(The missing posters on the lockers were a nice touch)

The lead-up to the climax comprises some LOVELY fashion shots. The cameos of the other Oculama HS OCs in their runway looks was a treat, and Angelica's costume was one of the coolest designs I've seen in an OC.

That last panel is an absolute slam dunk home run touchdown however you want to say it of a final shot. The dread in Edward's face leading up to it, the look on Angelica's on the photo, Jack just visible in the lens. It's SUCH a good ending, and I love how quickly Sera turns menacing in these final pages. Even having read the Jack vs Sera comic I wasn't thinking of the camera making a return in this comic, but I shouted aloud and pointed at the screen when I saw Sera brandish it at Angelica.

REALLY striking comic, and I'm thrilled to have gotten another round of Sera to enjoy.

You've done some really nice juggling of characters in this comic. Getting three characters to feel equally part of a story is a tough task but you've tackled it admirably here!

You also do a nice job distinguishing each character visually. Edward is different enough that he sets apart effortlessly, but I enjoyed the more subtle work you did with Angelica letting her expressions set her apart even in the panels where masking means slightly less detail for each character.

I was really into how you did Sera's eyes specifically; the all-black was a good way to set her character apart, but also was a really cool look for her!

Splendid stuff building intrigue over the course of the comic. The inclusion of the parents as a point of interest was an interesting decision, and between that and Angelica's confrontation of Edward and suspicion of his motives kept me as a reader hooked to the ending sequence.

I quite enjoyed the dead-all along angle of the ending; it's a well set-up reveal that does a solid job tying up the story leading up to it.

Very cool to see Edward again, and I think this might be the most interesting case you've given him yet. Great job!

Ninja - Wow! Another banger from you! I swear your art just keeps getting better and better. I wasn't sure what to expect with your comic but it surely did not disappoint. The fashion show was such a neat idea and Angelica looks GORGEOUS! That dress was marvelous. I love all the cameos and this is such a nice break from the brutality of the Death Games. The twist ending ties beautifully into your ongoing narrative. I’ve grown so attached to these characters, especially Sera, and I’ll miss them dearly. Phenomenal work!

Rhanny - Such a shame that the comic was not finished. Your panel layouts are pretty creative and I love how you've experimented with different angles. I would also suggest to use a single font for your speech bubbles. I understand that you probably did it to separate the character speech but they are actually distinct enough that I can tell them apart despite the fact that the art is not finished. The bittersweet ending was a stand out, leaving a powerful emotional resonance. Great job despite the challenges!

I liked this a lot, a basic premise that seems like it would lend itself to a more comedic plot, played for drama.
The idea of a runaway criminal caught up in a high school fashion show feels like a recipe for hijinks, but you put a lot of pathos into an apparently silly plotline.
My main gripe, though, is that it's a bit confusing.
It took me a couple read throughs to get a solid idea of what was actually going on.

Your perspective and anatomy still need work, but the ideas behind the compositions and backgrounds are very fun. The story is simple but quite effective.
I like how you incorporated the death games into your story.
A sketchier style also suits you.
The choice to have your opponents manifest as literal ghosts to reference their dead state is also inspired.
There's a bit of that old clunkiness, but overall everything flows quite well.
You did well with this one.

Great job utilizing both your opponents. I laughed a little too hard when Edward licked a mysterious substance he found on the ground. The premise feels a little bit convenient but it's not too distracting. Angelica's inclusion feels a little random. I feel like the beginning of the story could've used a little more context. The ending was a little abrupt as well, and while I may not have 100% gotten the idea of the camera I think I still got the gist of it. The art and paneling is amazing. Despite my griping on the story I thought it flowed really well and was incredibly entertaining.

While the art is rough I like all the interesting panels you have this time around. I don't know if this was a time issue but the lack of punctuation and the tailless speech bubbles were a bit distracting to me. I enjoyed the theme of closure you gave to Sera and how you implemented Angelica to be relevant to Sera's storyline. I'm intrigued how you're using the death games premise as a future mystery for your character to solve. I'm excited to see what that will lead to!