Oculama

The reveal of who won the war in this timeline is appropriately shocking, but beyond that, there's not much to this comic. The turnaround in the fight is also pretty cool, giving the Creep his one moment of shining through after his introduction, which was also pretty good.
But the art is, as you admitted, "ruff" and the writing lacks a bit.
The reveal would follow through better if it was clear earlier on precisely which war it was.

Not exactly my cup of tea, but very competently put together, particularly the opening, the "just another bag of shit" the one panel where you can see the mesh of Pavlov's mask, and it looks almost like teeth.
The Creep is also in peak form in this comic, being appropriately, well, creepy, and the reveal that he's the senator's son is quite fun. If I have a criticism, it's that, because of the amount of emphasis you put on the creep's eccentricity, the fight itself doesn't land particularly hard.

This was a cool and fun read. I like the way you differentiated the fighters with different colors. The alternate timeline was a neat idea, but i was a bit thrown with the reveal. Solid combat and showing of both opponents skills through the art. The backgrounds were solid, and i liked the different angles used. Overall this is a solid piece, and well put together for the time allotted to draw it. Good work.

All things considered, i feel this one was lacking in a few areas that perhaps could have been addressed with a little more time. I had to re-read how he won a few times plus seeing the other comic to understand why he won. I felt like you could have fleshed out your characters motivations a bit more and the ending is a bit abrupt. With no color and minimal background to help, this could have been better.

Starting off with saying I think you brought a really interesting concept to the table with this character! An alternate history story that has me curious about what happened in this timeline.

I thought your overall pacing was really nice, and I liked the color scheme you chose to go with for this comic!

Artwise, with some of the word bubbles being transparent and you can see some of the artwork behind/possible unintentional marks in some of them where a little distracting. Otherwise I liked your design of characters and felt like ward 9 had character.

Writing, I got a little confused as to why Pavlov couldn't move when told to stay back, I understand he is a good "dog" and obeys orders, but Im unsure why he would obey from someone he see's as a threat or enemy. I could see it as a reference to to classical conditioning,but it felt unclear. I also wasn't fully sure what the timer count down was referring to as well,I understand a minute was up and he could move again, but I felt like it wasn't made clear why he couldn't move in the first place. I think that situation could have used some more clarity.

overall though, I had fun reading this comic and I look forward to more work from you!

I really liked the direct and straight forward plot you did here for this comic and the little twist at the end was pretty funny. Overall a solid comic, pacing was good, I liked your use of hatching and use of blacks. I liked how you interpenetrated Pavlov's design as well.

One point that comes to mind is on page 4, where I think some of the layout and panel work didn't match the action as well as it could have, the second to last panel where the creep is tackling pavlov feels cramped, with the horizontal movement in a vertical panel. Some of the composition in relation to the word bubbles felt a little squeezed, like on page 5, panel three, "ooh that's smarts" could have benefited from being a raised a bit and made a bit larger to help balance out the panel, it comes off as a bit bottom heavy.

This was a really fun comic for a real fun character like the creep! well done!

even with the art being "ruff" lol the story still shines through clearly and flows well. the only thing I would criticize is that it would have been a little bit better to understand if you had him waking up or speaking with someone to have given a little bit of setup for who reactivated him and how or how he got put to sleep. I think you did a good job with the setup for the confrontation( not necessary a bad thing with the power getting cut but I think him being in the dark for the following panel would have been good) as well but the reasoning for TC to be there I think would have been a nice extra to put in the panels/text somewhere(unless I missed it). A VERY VERY good job on creating the weakness for your character for your opponent to take advantage of with the dog commands working on him and his raw emotions helping him breakout of the programing.Im interested to see where you go with the setup for the next comic as well.

your art style is always so interesting to see and I love the great yellow newspaper comic style coloring you went with and aswell as that nnostalgic hatching! the beginning leaves enough to get the jest that PP is there to do a assassination mission but not so much why or who is giving him the order to carry out. likewise its a bit of a struggle as to why the creep is there waiting for him or how he knew PP was coming there. The confrontation/battle was very quick and again I love your cross hatching and your great expressions for both of the OCs during the battle but I think a little bit of an extension would have been okay before or a view more panels the stabbing cutaway. still very great style and I love the little funny morbid shot at the end with PP's head and TC talking to his mum lol.

We come to a neat first round! I tend to dive into first rounds of tournies to see if we get a snap shot of who your character is and what their deal it and I believe you achieved that. It's no secret Pavlov is a little off, and somewhat of a time displaced individual waiting for God knows how long in a cordoned off piece of territory. The use of color coding to showcase who is who was a creative angle and the establishment of environments for these characters to kick around in is always welcome. I appreciate the rush of a comic deadline but if I had any notes, I'd recommend tightening up your inks. As the pages progress, your linework gets looser and looser which I think dings your quality. I'm used to seeing your humor in comics ,so this was an interesting serious take with an unsettling end.

I believe the aim of the comic was to reveal n alternate timeline, but I had hoped that this was just hardcore gaslighting on the Creeps part to assail and already unbalanced mind. I don't think your angle is wrong, and I'll be curious to see if your run in the Contract is in this dystopian world, but I wonder if leaving the reader and Pavlov uncertain about reality would've been stronger.

I LOVE the way you portrayed Pavlov. Getting a momentum going with their duties as a killer, building up to the eventual encounter with The Creep was great. This comic sums up what you advertised on the tin: The Creep is a creep. The way he gets into dispatching Pavlov and using their head as a foot rest is just the unsettling cherry on top of a neat opening comic for the first round.
Your inks are chunky and real fun. Your choices for spot blacks really helped set the mood of the cloak and dagger business contract killers thrive on. I think your leanings on graphic design are peeking through as well as your stylization really make for an aesthetically lovely comic.

An interesting bit of world-building for this character round one! The usage of this alternative world history was a very compelling bit of storytelling to play with and that really would make any future comics with this character interesting for that reason alone. Clearly you were under a bit of a time strain with the comic. Spot black inking is your friend! Utilize them in the future to help make the line art not so sparse when you're running short on time. Still, this was a fun one! Good work!

Your line art was looking nice, but for all of the parts where you were doing some single direction hatching-scribbles for shadow, you would have done better utilizing some grey-scale shading here, instead. It would have been faster and we would have had a much stronger effect due to the detail of the inks and characters you were using with the characters already. Your story is quick and serviceable, not a lot of plot getting in the way of that particular story, but with the characters involved, it feels appropriate. You've done better work before, you'll do better work in the future, but this one is okay for as fast as you knocked it out. Learn more skills to help speed your process-to-quality ratio up! Solid work!

The art is a little sketchy in places, but still pretty clear and the little bits of color are fun. In some places, linework is visible behind the word balloons, which makes them harder to read. Lots of good expressions!
I think you did a good job portraying both characters with a lot of personality, they're such weirdos. The dog stuff is a fun weakness for a character to have. I am kind of confused with the history stuff... Is the Creep lying, or does Pavlov come from an alternate timeline?

Very efficient storytelling, keeping everything moving quickly and keeping things interesting. Good job portraying two psychos while keeping them very unique flavors of weird.
Really good use of deep shadow to set the mood. All the action is very clear and there's a lot of great faces. The knife lick on page 5 is my favorite. Pavlov's defeat felt like a little bit of an anticlimax because he got taken out so quickly? But he did get to do a cool takedown on the guard. Overall a very fun and fast paced comic.

Shame it's in an incomplete state, but I did enjoy the art here. The messy coloring was charming and your overall line art was solid, especially The Creep's appropriately Creepy look.

Story-wise, you have a good setup and the fight itself is well-executed. My biggest issue is the exposition dump on the penultimate page; it's a bit clunky and out of nowhere, so it doesn't really have the gravitas "the Nazis won and nuked the shit out of everyone" should have.

Really enjoyed the art style here; solid line art and fun use of shading

The story was admittedly a bit of a letdown. Well-executed, sure, but aside from The Creep being (The) Creepy, there wasn't a ton of meet to it. As enjoyable as it was, it didn't really set the stage for anything else or suggest more depth to The Creep besides the obvious.

Basically, I want to see signs that I can go into a Creep fight against an arbitrary opponent and not automatically know how it's going to play out.